Potential totally destroyed by poor writing and abundant grammar errors
925417
This book represents everything bad in self-publishing. It takes a story-line with potential and totally destroys it with abysmal writing, loose ends and implausibilities. I said the story line had promise, and a good editor could probably have made a decent book out of it. Unfortunately the author doesn't know the difference between to and too, then and than, and a myriad of other grammar niceties that can really grate on someone who notices the errors. The errors in this book weren't quite as prevalent as those in the first book, but they were still too numerous. If you don't notice spelling errors, then you might find the book enjoyable light reading. If you do notice errors, stay away.
3512418
There are several grammatical errors. SEVERAL. I'm not even sure how this book was published and released with that many errors. I think the author, or publishers need to carefully read the book themselves and find them all. There is one on at least every page. I noticed misspelled words too. I think a middle school student could write better than this.  If you're a writer, I would think you would know how to spell and use grammar. This author clearly doesn't know. I will not be reading anymore books by her unless she goes back to school and learns how to spell and use grammar properly. I would give it a no star rating, but it wouldn't let me. There were commas where there should have been periods, tons of run-on sentences, no question marks after asking questions, and improper forms of words like, to, too, and two.

Don't even get me started on the story line, Emily gets so upset over the dumbest things, overdramatizes everything, and very self absorbed. Also, what a TERRIBLE ending. It just ends without explanation. I'm surprised this book was even released. I wish there was an option to give negative stars, because I give it negative five stars.
2919226
The storyline held my interest but my overall enjoyment was ruined by the frequent -- and most egregious -- errors in grammar, syntax, and spelling.  Is it truly so difficult to find a competent editor or proofreader?  Mr. or Ms Burnell, you have much potential as an author but I cannot emphasize strongly enough the responsibility you have to your audience to write clearly and competently by correctly applying the rules of the English language.  At the very least, learn the proper uses for the apostrophe.  Please?
2673068
Don't get me wrong, it could be really great, but the grammatical and spelling errors were so distracting that I stopped reading it after three or so pages.
678036
I have no idea who is giving this book all of these 5 star ratings! This story has a lot of potential but is in desperate need of editing. The author clearly had a knack for creating characters and and crafting plots but the multitude of errors in spelling, formatting and basic grammar were too much for me. I may never know how this book ends because my emotional investment in the characters was no match for the sloppy writing. I'm insulted that anyone finds it appropriate to charge 2.99 for this book.
2867864
This book has a great plot and a huge amount of potential,  but the terrible writing ruins it.  To begin with,  the grammar--lots of commas where there shouldn't be,  and plenty of places where necessary commas have been left out.  Additionally,  the writer (I won't call this person an "author") switches randomly back and forth between past and present tense.

I could deal with all of that,  though,  if the narrative was good,  but it isn't.  It's very stilted, and feels more like a play-by-play or diary entries than a story.  The vocabulary is weak,  the dialogue is bland, and the characters do not provoke much sympathy.

The author claims to be writing a sequel.  I, for one, won't be reading it.
1855046
I only got halfway through. The grammatical errors and typos were horrible! Even one round of proof-reading and editing would have done this short a world of good.
Seriously, in one of the first chapters, Sam goes from being 14 to 15 in a matter of paragraphs.
The author really should have taken the time to correct some very obvious errors before putting this out there.
830729
This book is badly in need of an editor. The author cannot decide whether to use past tense or present tense, so she alternates back and forth between the two, often in the same sentence. There are way too many typos and grammatical errors. The author is badly in need of a good writing course, because the writing here is amateurish and just plain bad. I winced my way through 16% of the book and just had to quit when I got to this sentence: "I sit up quickly when a loud thud and the word '****' gets thrown into the air." In what world is this considered good writing? The heroine is supposed to be damaged, but I found her to be just bratty and defiant to the point of stupidity, even though she keeps TELLING us that she's charming and witty. If I knew her in real life, I wouldn't like her.  And because it is written in first person, the reader is forced to endure the chaos of her thinking processes. The hero is supposed to be dominant and sexy. At least that's what the author keeps telling us. But she's SHOWING us that he's nothing more than an arrogant, domineering jerk. The author's misuse of big words, in what I can only believe is an attempt to appear more knowledgeable than she is, is irritating. The sentence, "I am not an experiential project, Hunter." would have been so much better if it had been simply, "I'm not a science project, Hunter."  And the constant use of the 'f' word as an adjective to describe nearly EVERYTHING is analogous to the Smurfs describing everything as 'Smurfy'.

I have read some of the five-star reviews and cannot believe that those people actually read this book, especially the ones raving about the hot chemistry between Kat and Hunter.  Trust me, there was absolutely NO chemistry between Kat and Hunter.  Nor can I believe that NONE of those rave reviews said a single word about the bad grammar, typos, punctuation and misspelled words that were rife in this book.  How could they not have noticed? How could they not have thought that this might be an important thing to mention in a review?  In fact, their praise is so perky and sprightly, over the top, and completely oblivious to the galactically epic number of flaws in this book, I suspect they're all friends and relatives of the author.  Don't be fooled.  Read the one-star reviews and heed their advice.  Save yourself the price of this book.
2097474
If it were written for a high school project, it would have been very good. However, it was filled with grammatical errors and I question whether or not it had been professionally edited. Some examples from my Kindle version: 1) "The was news to most of them." 2) "Ryan had to give credit to Irene and Eliza for well they were doing..." 3) 'I'm know he's a very capable man..." 4)"...straightened up and removed her right arm from her left shoulder".
There were dozens of these--either typos, grammar issues, etc. Then, the story attempted to follow a reasonable premise and trajectory, but got lost in too many unlikely events. A teenage boy and father with minimal weapon experience who help kill over 50 attacking raiders during brutal weather. The mother who abhors guns and has never shot one, being able to use a pump shotgun and kill three armed attackers. Crashing their RV through multiple roadblocks--at subzero temperatures--at it just keeps on going. Losing control of the RV and getting stuck in a ditch in Antarctic winter conditions in a remote area, just to find a farmer and a tractor within seconds of the crash who graciously extricates them from their predicament. Just a whole series of lucky, unlikely and absurd factors that eventually seems to be attributed to divine intervention for just their family.
3442427
I often buy self-published sci-fi books on amazon, this one belongs to the worst I've read so far, which led me to write my first review ever:

The Idea behind the story would be captivating, if not for the huge number of grammatical mistakes, the horrible writing style and some plot elements that aren't thought out well.
Past and present tense are mixed randomly (often in the same paragraph), 80% of the story is in direct speech (lack of descriptions) and characters show their "wry" smile or grin on a regular basis (which started to annoy me after the 4. or 5. occasion). On the idea to emigrate all muslims worldwide to a parallel earth, because their societies are "sick" (not my words) I spare any further comment...

2 Stars because its really low price - you get what you pay for
3570671
Honestly, I wanted to like this book.  It has a good idea behind the plot line.  (I also read it for a friend, otherwise I would never have finished it.)  However, the continuous grammatical and punctuation errors made it impossible to enjoy.  The worst was the incorrect use of the verb "lied" throughout the book.  "I lied there on the street bleeding." or "I lied in my bed thinking."  The correct verb there would be lay.  I lay there in the street bleeding or I lay in my bed thinking.  If you want to make money from your writing, you need to be able to use the English language correctly.  There were too many instances where the author left out comma after comma. Also, I found myself longing for more interesting vocabulary.  There was a page where the author wrote "in that instant" three times on the same page.  Really?  There was no other way to express that thought?  Even the plot line suffered.  The main character would suffer huge shifts between emotions and trust of characters.  It was very difficult to follow and rather annoying.  I just didn't like her anymore within the first quarter of the book.  The author wrote it best in this sentence near the very end of the book: "Although we were both always so wishy-washy when it came to our feelings for one another and both highly irrational at times, I knew he cared about me too."  The author admits they were both highly irrational throughout the 500 page book.
If you want a book that is well written and has a rational plot line, then this is not the book for you, sorry.  Please, don't waste your time.
3120372
I was very much looking forward to reading and enjoying this book, but by the end of the second chapter I closed it and tossed it in the Goodwill pile. The book is in serious need of an editor, an editor who can spell and knows the difference between 'its' and 'it's'. Most of the time the apostrophe was missing. This is something that really irritates me especially in a published book. I can't even tell you what the story was about because I started looking for errors, red pen in hand and found seven in the first twelve pages.
63896
The story has great potential.  Unfortunately, this book is actually difficult to read because of the poor use of grammer and editing.  The book appears to have been published without being proofread. There is a lack of quotation marks except on a couple of pages near the end. Sentences are started with an ampersand. Some words are made up (badness) and some words are misspelled (O for Oh). Disappointing and unprofessional.
1644841
I'm all for people out there writing and self publishing, it gives many a great chance they possibly wouldn't have had years ago. However these people need to at least ask a friend who can read English to review the book for them before putting out there for the entire world to read. The spelling, grammar and punctuation errors in this were too much for me to get past to even try to enjoy the story. Which wasn't that good, lets be honest. There was no mystery, no buildup. We knew the whole story right from the start and just had to get through a few hundred pages of them having copious amounts of s*x and telling each other they love them constantly. Oh and the giggling and crying. If I never see the word giggle again I'll be happy.
In short, this writer needs to get someone, anyone, to read her books before publishing them so at least the stupid and obvious errors are fixed. Good on her for having a go, but she needs to do more of the background work before unleashing this drivel on the public.
3992084
I had to stop reading this book due to the blatant errors in the author's grammar.  It was driving me crazy to read the plural form of mothers and fathers written as mother's and father's, to read the word sense when since was the correct word. Written properly or edited, this could have been a great read.
4772473
This might be an interesting, even good political thriller, but a combination of poor grammar and sloppy editing made it hard to follow the plot. Every few pages there were typos and grammatical errors that were so grating I felt as though I was reading with my mouth full of lemons. Words that were supposedly plural lacked the last s; words that should have been plural, i.e. senators, read as possessives (senator's). When I read "question and answer faze" I couldn't believe that someone hadn't read the book prior to publication and done some editing. At first I thought that the writing and editing would improve, but halfway through the book, these kinds of terrible mistakes made me able to read only a few pages before giving up for a while. While vacationing, I tend to read a book a day. This book, however, has made the last two days go slowly and I'm still less than two-thirds of the way through it. Yikes, it hurts to read a decent book while shaking my head and wondering who let all of these huge mistakes slip past them.
4093860
I probably wouldn't have bothered writing a review for this book, except that I'm a little bit put out that I spent so much money on it.  Let me start by saying that this was a story with potential.  If it had been better written, I might have really enjoyed it.  Unfortunately, the book reads like a first draft that was dictated using the worst voice recognition software you have ever heard of.  Need some examples?  How about these?

"Only Lords are allowed in such meetings, maintaining their power, for the Emperor is including every male is unprecedented."

"Bodies crumb and fall under the on slot of Vasteri rage."

"He's own quarters had better at least been cleaned."

Alas, these are not isolated examples of bad writing.  The entire book reads like it was written by an elementary school student.  Go ahead and add shifting verb tenses, appalling diction, and horrific punctuation, and you will have some idea what it's like to slog through this mess.

There are some gigantic logic gaps that are also somewhat annoying, but I don't have the energy to get into those.  The bottom line is that I'm not sure I could recommend this book if it were free, but I certainly can't do so at $3.99.