good story, would be better if
924826
Good story from one of the former Gaddafis female "guards". Story about man constantky full of viagar raping and having sex with everyone. But lousy comments from writer that refuses to see that woman position in Lybia is not influenced only by one man.
4116764
Interesting story, somewhat repetitive in some of the details, some grammer issues, however the story overrides these minor issues. would recommend
2929427
I liked the story, but the book could have used just a bit more editing.  I was exhausted with the amount of conversations taking place in the book.
More narrative would have improved the book tremendously.
4948757
It's a good story, and the author does a good job covering the large timescale.  Sometimes the pacing is very erratic - the story will spend 5 pages talking about a technical solution to a problem, and then it jumps centuries forward without much comment.  It may have been more readable if the story was more of a trilogy than a standalone.  I can see this becoming a movie someday though, and I'd be first in line to see it.
1827344
For people like myself (Canadian Old Order Mennonite relatives and ancestors, still 'dress plain' myself) it was a good story.

But would have been a better read if the first half had been more condensed and not so many pages devoted to the frequently repeated self-doubts of the central characters. We got the message by the 3rd repetition, and after that it was no longer helped to advance the plot.

My suggestion for the author is just make it a shorter read by reducing the first 2/3 by at least 1/3. My suggestions for readers is to read fast until the last 1/3 and then sit back and savor the eventual outcome of the story with is very satisfying.
883911
This Book had a great premise, and was a good story - though it would have been nice if the story were a little deeper.  It was hard to connect with characters at times, but overall, I found it to be an entertaining story and a good read.
1126100
The Good: Events of the story take place over a short period of time following several different characters so it doesn't take very long before events start to come together and tie the various characters to each other. Characters have noticeable differences, with some more headstrong and others more easygoing, and events of the story throw them all together, whether they like it or not. Overall an interesting read that combines reality with elements of a fictional world coming to terms with recently revealed supernatural beings while opposing forces race against time for ancient relic that could decide the fate of the world.

The Bad: While most of the main and supporting characters had a more clearly developed personality, some felt more like an after thought in regards to both their personality and inclusion in the story(though this is something that will be addressed in Book II according to the author). Other than that my only issues were more personal preference, such as the occasional redundancy. Nothing serious enough to detract from the story.

The Ugly: Clearly not a standalone book that noticeably sets the stage for bigger and better events in the yet to be released sequel and, as such, feels somewhat anticlimactic at the end, even with other events coming full circle. However, with the anticipation for a sequel instilled and the knowledge that said sequel is being actively worked on was also a deciding factor in the rating.
466915
Good story, but cant together a little too quickly. Should have developed relationship between father  and son with a little more twist.
2949259
Intriguing story, keeps you involved...but could have used a little something more depth. That said, it's worth the read, and I'm glad I read it.
Note: I read this book for free as a part of KindleFirst, but I probably would have paid to read it if it had been recommended to me.
1953168
The overall story is excellent, the characters mostly believable though sometimes the language choices in the dialog of the more educated seems to echo the street talk a bit much. IT also tends to get a bit preachy in parts and sometimes meanders through irrelevant scenes that do not really in my mind move the book forward or broaden the world view.
1506562
I liked the story but it could have been edited a little better. It's good to have things repeated in case you forget what's going on but not over and over again.
1083095
I like the concept of the book, but sometimes the story jumps and can be hard to pick up where it left off. Over all the story is good, anyone would enjoy it.
1571681
Good story probably could have been developed a little more, also there should be a clear break in scenes try double spacing so we know that a particular scene is over
4936984
Overall I enjoyed this story.  The story line was interesting, but for some of the plot themes it should have been longer.

I didn't understand how Milo could 'be beaten to a pulp' by his captors yet remain pregnant.  (Yes this book has mpreg).  Along that same thought is why didn't Milo tell Bryson about the abuse?

The biggest thing for me was Milo's father wasn't confronted or caught.  He got away with kidnapping his son.  Now maybe another story follows up on this theme where justice is served . . . But it should have come in this book.  It was odd that Bryson's friends were looking into anything and everything to frame the guy, but they forgot what was right under their noses.  This guy kidnapped his son.  They can get him for that.

The story was well written and a good continuation of the series.  Unfortunately the relationship with Bryson and Milo was too new to be convincing and then the kidnapping.  Suddenly they're thrust into fatherhood and they barely know each other.  - Dan's Wife
4884958
enjoyed the story, need to be longer... could have easily made it longer with more details or more drama... still good though
4857534
I like the story, which is good because I am in absolute despair over this new trend of books being written in first-person present tense. Each chapter has to be titled as to who is narrating. Forgive me for being old and/or old-fashioned, but I want someone to tell me a story, not narrate the character's current life. Even people who write in journals write them in past tense.
That said, it is a good story of England between the wars, with a touch of Pygmalion. I personally think it could've been a richer, fuller story written in 3rd person omniscient, eliminating the need to head each chapter as to whose viewpoint it is, but that is just opinion. If you have a liking for the 20s and seeing a girl get her dreams fulfilled, give this book a go.
2004388
In general, I liked this story. It had a lot going on in the plot and great subplots. The general idea was good and I think I get the concept of where the author wanted to go with this, but I also think it fell short of achieving that goal.

First, the writing is a little weak, and the book could use a really good developmental and line edit. Getting a good developmental editor on this good concept could have made all the difference in the world. There were instances of misspelled words, missing words, duplicated words, lots of run-on sentences and more. I am not a stickler for perfect grammar, either, but grammar should be good enough to ease the ability to read the book. The grammar sometimes made this a difficult read.

I enjoyed the adventures the two main characters embarked upon, and I liked the premise of the story--the problem is, I think the book started in the wrong place and put too much focus on the wrong things, so that at the end, we have no conclusions. Is this supposed to be a part of a series? If so, then I see no evidence of that. And yet, the sub-plots were not tied up at all. What happened with the children? Why were they chosen? How are so few going to be able to do anything major to change the world? Who were their parents? I'm assuming high-ranking families, people with some power or political pull? THAT was the story... but instead, we are given some conspiracy theories by an ex-employee while the read story--and the perpetrator--hides in the shadows and we're never shown that. Then at the end, we get sort of thrown into a sub-story of the man in the wilderness with his sick daughter, and it ends on a complete cliffhanger. Why?

It doesn't feel complete. There's no real ending to it, but I see no evidence this is a series. So I'm left, instead of feeling satisfied by a good story come to an end, feeling quite confused.

I really wanted to like this book, because I really liked the premise of the 'advertised' plot, but the book didn't really give me that plot--it didn't fulfill its promise--so instead I'm left with a lot of questions and feeling slightly frustrated at the way it ended.

And what frustrates me even more is that it had so much potential... it could have been and should have been so good.

All that said, I do like the author's voice (with the need of better editing), and I like the tone of the story. The characters were mostly believable and authentic, though I'd like to see them developed more. I think point of view is really weak but I do like seeing the story from several different angles. The locations in the story were a nice bonus too, woven in between the plot.

Overall, it's a good effort, a decent book. But it took me a while to get into the story, because of the difficulties expressed above. In the end, I'm glad I read it and don't feel like it wasted my time. I think it's worth the read--but if you're expected a hard-core sci-fi, this isn't it. If you're expecting a Christian book, this isn't it either. But it's a good action/adventure genre, with a futuristic bent to it.