I read the whole book, bad writing made it unenjoyable to read
341755
Bad grammer, lack of puctuation, and plot flaws made this not fun to read. It DID capture my interest by making me interested in the characters, that is the only reason that I finished the book. It seems it was written for a 12 year old audience that could not spot the obvious plot flaws and inconsistencies in the story.
825393
I wanted to like this book.  It does have a good premise, but the writing is absolutely horrible.  It reads like it was written by someone in Junior High School.  It jumps around a lot, and repeats a lot.  Not to mention the horrible paragraph structure and lack of editing.
1156825
I made it maybe five pages in before I had to give up and just delete it.  It might get better later on, but the writing and the premise in the first chapter are so awful that I had to reread it a few times to see if I was missing something that explained things.  I'd advise against this one.
707007
Not going to write down everything that happened in the book that made me wince because that would be too long, but suffice it to say the writing style was atrocious, there were "twists" that accomplished nothing other than making the book longer, and the character personalities seemed to be fluid or incredibly flat. The world created is shaping up to be interesting though.
65650
This book easily wins my award for "The worst book I ever read on Kindle" - what a waste of time it was!

I don't object to the graphic sex and violence, it's the writing style of the whole book that really irritated me and spoiled any enjoyment I may have otherwise got from the story.

I'd figured out the cause of the "supernatural" events by the time I was about 35% into the book, after which I just skimmed through the remainder to see if the writing improved (it didn't) and to see if I was correct about the ending (I was).

I give this book one star for the author's vivid imagination - it's unfortunate that she didn't translate the product of that imagination into a more enjoyable reading experience.
4100700
The author of this book came up with an intriguing idea but,blew it
with terrible writing.
A mega wealthy man dies and leaves very little to his family only,a place
to live,meals, and only $1,000.00 per person/per year and no way to dispute
the will.  Some of the relatives were predictable and one bucked up and took
control of her life.
My issue with the book was the terrible writing which mostly consisted of random
thoughts where I had to go back and figure out just,"who" is speaking this again ?
Also sentences which came out of nowhere and did not have to do with what was
going on at that moment. The whole story lacked structure.  Badly written.
2824175
I will admit that I could not get past the 6 percent mark. What I read was not bad as in the story itself. The book actually set up the beginning of the story well. What was not ok and basically horrible was the writing. From the spelling mistakes(7:05 being seven-oh-five), to the fragments, to the run on sentences, the writing was just horrible. I do love that platforms like kindle allows some to live a dream and be a writer. And I really love that others put themselves and their work out there for others to enjoy and review; However, authors have got to know how to write. It is very important to have a basic understanding of sentence structure when you are writing. This is all we the readers have to get to know your characters. When there is zero editing done it makes it hard for some of us to get past the first 3 pages. Because the story concept was one I was willing to read I actually started to make notes to hopefully find a way to send to the author. Yet after just a few pages I had over 5 notes of obvious and HUGH mistakes that I gave up on that and this book. Word 2010 would have caught all of the issues I found, but if one does not know how to correct or take the time to have their work reviewed that program and any other like it is a waste.
I gave this work two stars because it's clear that the concept of the book was a good one. However, the execution was not ok at all. To the author I would encourage you to keep living your dream but also care about your work. If you release a second edition of this book that has been edited (I'll even do it for FREE) please tell us by putting it somewhere on the book so I and other readers like me can give this another go. Good luck!
3652219
Where to start. The concept of these books have a solid idea, however, the actual writing is deplorable. Now, I can see why American youth cannot form sentences because they read things that are not grammatically correct, riddled with typos, punctuation errors etc... I would have gladly skimmed over a few typo's, but this was much more that that. I got to the point where I was tired of making editing notes for the sake of sanity. The author makes abrupt breaks in the writing and forgets where she left off as the logistics of the story confound the reader. (ie. He wants to take her flying and leaps off with her and two pages later she's apologetic because she wanted to fly and didn't know where she wanted to go.) I won't even begin to get into the verb confusion that is the writers apparent style.

  It continues to get worse with the second book, where the author confuses character names with each other (cal and ivan), Sometimes you have to decipher who is talking because of poor punctuation, and even then some of the dialog is from a foreign origin and doesn't fit in.  The author claims to have a journalism degree, either they're selling those willy nilly, or somehow she didn't have to take English 101 or 102. I simply cannot allow my young reader to read these stories because of the sad writing (yes, I proofread every book my child wants to read for the sake of avoiding these horrible English mistakes, because once you start seeing them your mind thinks they are correct, when they are not.)

  Again, the plots need to move along and there is little to no climax in the first book. The second book just abruptly cuts off and into some weird interview of characters that makes little to no sense. In book 1, you learn the protagonist' mother is dying, she's still alive at the end of book 2.. the story is very stagnant and is a battle to get through. I usually can read a good YA in about 2 hours, not so with these books because I originally started editing them for my mini-me, and then because it was so tiresome and repetitive, it became grueling work.  The only positive thing I can say is that the author threw in some quarter words and spelled them correctly.

 To the author , I would say read, revise, edit, and then do it 3 times more and hire a very good editor to complete the last revision. This is not up to publication standards.
3947617
The plot was moderately interesting, but the writing was so bad that I had to force myself to finish the book.

I won't be searching for titles by "most popular" any more, that's for sure.
2031525
I stopped reading on the first page. As an editor, I simply couldn't wade through the terrible writing.
3022971
Tons of writing in the book, making it distracting to read
720530
After reading several of the other reviews on this book, I felt I could buy it with confidence and settle into a great read. But I am sad to say the writing was a HUGE disappointment. The organization of the story was so poor, I had to keep going back to reread sections just to attempt to make sense of the jumble. And while the story line had possibility, the laboriousness of trying to read the book overall totally detracted from everything else. When I get into a suspense novel, I like being carried away by the experience. The only reason I finished this book is because I spent the money to buy it!
840018
Interesting plot, could have been an excellent book, but the writing is terrible, a hodgepodge of every cliche and bad bumper sticker line the author ever heard and remembered. Plenty of overly sentimental mushy philosophy that added nothing to the story. The sophomoric humor and juvenile dialogue detracted from characters that might otherwise have been like-able. Far fetched involvement of the U. S. President and Director of FBI detracted from believability and the unrealistic capabilities attributed to information technology didn't help either. Too much crammed into one book made the reading tedious, could have been half as long, twice as good, and more enjoyable if properly written. Hope the author can learn from his mistakes and write a better book on his second try.
1995751
Terrible sentence construction and horrific dialogue are just the beginning. The author gives its Bill Gates character the name of Will Bates, the Palin character becomes Whelan, and the reader is lost in one of the worst books written in the past few years. I'm so happy I didn't have to pay for it. I kept going back to it, hoping that something of interest would happen; unfortunately that didn't occur and I finally had to give up. I tried to give this author every possible chance but just could not get past the very very poor writing. I'm curious about the author's other books but can't make myself pay to find out.
4529424
I almost gave up on this book in chapter one because the writing was so bad, but Im glad I didn't because the story was entertaining. Will I read another of this authors books? Maybe in a few years after hes had time to develop his craftbecause I see enormous potential here, but also the bigand sadly all too common these daysmistake of jumping into the Kindle world and Publishing Before Ready.

Several things about the writing style drove me crazy, most significantly his severe overwriting and annoying repetition as the author pounded his point into our heads. Disembodied limbs as his hand reached out made me think of those movies where the hero gets a limb transplant from an executed serial killer and the hand starts stabbing people of its own accord. He scanned the snow with his eyes thanks for pointing this out, as Id thought he was scanning the snow with his tentacles. Point of view bounces all over the place so half the time I couldn't tell whose thoughts we were in. The authors lazy fluctuation really impaired the character development that also had so much potential, and I came away not really caring about the characters. Halfway through the book I could tell who the author was going to kill off in what order by his alienation of thorough character development.

But that said, the pacing was spot on, and kept me turning pages, so I gave this book three stars when it really deserved 2.5.
655573
It's a decent story idea, but the writing is horrific. I could only get about half-way through before I just gave up trying to skim over the run-on sentences, jarring pov changes, and general lack of proof-reading. Author should pick up "Elements of Style", by William Strunk, and study it. Waste of money when there are so many great books to be read.
3213978
Sorry. The writing was not good. I read halfway and then just browsed the rest of the book. It is set up for another book but I would never waste my time on another by this author.