Decent story ,painful grammar
588559
The story is fairly good, but the author forces everything into the present tense, making for a more difficult read
3709280
The story is decently imagined, and the author definitely has promise. However, this book suffers from the Curse of Self-Publishing: Mr. Cobble is seriously in need of both a proofreader and a good editor. Typographical errors, confusing use (or lack thereof) of punctuation, and occasionally confusing wording frequently interrupt the flow of the story. Similarly, the prose sometimes feels stilted, one simple, indifferently punctuated, sentence after another. I do think Mr. Cobble has some storytelling talent; however, if he's going to self-publish, he should consider paying for the services of an editor.
154539
The story was good, but the writing was weak - using "set" for "sit" and other grammatical errors. Should have been proofread.
3247195
I like the story line, I like the voice, I like the characters and the way they're filled out. But grammatical mistakes really get in the way of the enjoyment.

There are numerous problems with subject/verb agreement. Quotations marks are left out, or out in the wrong place, or put in where none are needed. There are run-on sentences. There are partial sentences. There are commas where semi-colons are needed and vice versa. Not once or twice, but at least one of these problems on each and every page. Most word processing programs have a grammar check function, which would fix most of the problems, or at least point them out so that the author/editor could fix them. Please, please, please, someone re-edit this book so that it's readable!
1690656
The book itself wasn't bad. However the constant misuse in grammar was almost enough to make me stop reading. Such as using want when there clearly should have been where used. Very frustrating.
3774791
The story had some merit, but the writing was so bad that getting through it was a struggle.  The author is in desperate need of a good editor and should never be tempted to release another story unedited.  The grammar is oftentimes atrocious and the misuse of words is inexcusable.
If you don't know the meaning of a word,  DON'T use it!  And the run on sentences, aggravated even more by poor punctuation, are plentiful. You don't need endless and redundant adjectives to describe events, people, objects, etc... I suspect the author was trying to sound like he possesses a great vocabulary, but the countless instances of misuse creates the opposite impression. He would do well to buy a reputable dictionary and thesaurus along with securing the services of a reputable editor to clean up this mess.  That said, the author tells a decent story.
3365661
While the story has a pretty cool premise--astral travel and taking over bodies and such--the story was unfortunately riddled with spelling and grammatical errors on every page, which made it tough to stay immersed. I still commend the author for the interesting storyline and idea, though I thought the main character was a bit bratty (she is 13 after all, but I am not, so it was hard to relate).  I highly recommend the author hire a good editor to clean this one (and future books) up.
2002929
I like the storyline, even though it is basically a rewrite of Harry Potter book 1 but starring a 9 year old girl in the United States. The slight differences are nice and it is a complete 'year one' book with a solid ending, but my big challenge was staying with it to finish it because of the grammar issues. Since I've edited several books for others, they just glare at me in this story. Hopefully, these will be taken as constructive criticism.

Missing commas or commas in the wrong places is a big one. Using the wrong 'to' and 'too' plus 'then and 'than' throughout the book is another. Just running it through a grammar checker will catch a lot of the errors. But not always ones like this example of quoting someone.

When you quote someone speaking, you don't put the person as a separate sentence, but separate the parts with a comma:
  Do: "The book is missing," he said to Edgar.
  Don't: The book is missing." He said to Edgar.

Another thing, you don't have to put the 'he said', 'she said' after what they say, it can also go at the beginning. This is useful when they are speaking a few sentences. I caught myself several times getting part-way through what they are saying to just to the end to see who is saying it. These are my reasons for only giving it two stars. It would've been three if the grammar was not as bad and I didn't have to challenge myself to keep reading it. I applaud you for being a free spirit, to 'be your crazy self'--that's great! But sometimes rules still need to be followed like stopping for a red ligh and using proper English.

As such, I am somewhat reluctant to try any more books in this series... the grammar ad word usage need to be much better. I'll read the "Look inside" segment to check the grammar there.
238558
The storyline is very good; definitely keeps you interested. However, the grammar is horrible and so distracting at times, I had difficulty focusing on the great story. In addition, there are moments where the author seems to be very young and somewhat sexist as his writing is often very immature. Unfortunately, I will not be purchasing any of the subsequent novels by this author because of this. Maybe in a few years...  Best of luck, Mr. Pratt.
1503793
I found the story line interesting enough to finish the book but it was a major struggle. The English language took a severe beating in this book. Words misspelled, misplaced and occasionally repeated, such as, took took near the end of one sentence. One of the characters is an alcoholic. With all of the constant, glaring mistakes, it made me wonder if it was written in a state of inebriation. Either that or it was typed and proofread by a fourth grader.
4546194
I would have given this at least another star or so, but the poor punctuation and word use became too annoying. It makes me think that much of the story was dictated using voice recognition and not proofed afterwards. The world has a plentiful supply of commas, but the author seems unsure of how they are used, usually omitting them. Add to that the repeated misuse of your vs. you're and passed instead of past. It's too bad, because it could be a nice (light) read.
36519
I liked that this story has MCs whose ages are over 35 and that it deals with the vagaries of dating, but the story could have been much better. It really needs an editor! Misplaced punctuation, incomplete sentences, incorrect grammar, and just poor writing plague the reader throughout the story, including stupid homonym mistakes such as using perimeter where parameter should have been used. It could have been a contender...
1463575
The story is intriguing, if far fetched, and the dialogue between the friends is believable. However the writing is stilted and choppy, awkward and clumsy. It seemed as if it was written by a highschooler, which made some of the sex scenes uncomfortable to read, thinking of a 15-year-old writing them. The book also needs some serious editing - everywhere there should not have been an apostrophe, there was  one (they had some beer's), and when an apostrophe was required, there wasn't one. There was little punctuation (commas make a difference!), lots of run-on sentences that I had to read two or three times to understand, and the requisite their/there mistake. I'd actually like to know how the story continues (this was part1 of a series , not standalone), but it's not worth paying for. Classes or a writer's  circle could benefit this author immensely.
3720612
Good story, well-enough plotted to make me want to see how it ended. If I had a criticism, it would be that the grammar, punctuation, and proof-reading are all terrible. The author's blurb says that he "is pretending to be a writer." Well, stop pretending, buy yourself a book of rules of English grammar, and be a real writer !!

Biggest complaint, and the most annoying: "IT'S" means "IT IS", and "ITS" is a PRONOUN, the POSSESSIVE form of IT. Look it up in the book you buy.
4820659
Good story, well developed, but in desperate need of 1. copy editing, and 2. a return to a basic grammar class. Ending sentences with a preposition constantly, a distracting number of sentences ending with question marks when the sentence was not a question, overuse of exclamation points, and an alarming number of instances where the subject was singular and the verb plural, or vice versa. These all occurred so often that they became a distraction.
771751
Good stories, often told in an interesting way, but the grammar is atrocious. The series is a decent read if you've got kindle unlimited, but I doubt I'd bother with them otherwise.
207122
The story was well-developed and drew you in.  There were so many grammatical errors, mis-used words, fragmented thoughts, and mixed tenses, however, that it was painful to read.  I understand that the writer had very limited education as a youngster, so I do not fault her.  Where were the editors???  Did no one with a firm grasp of the English language review this book before publishing?  The book had the potential to be great, but fell short.

Finally, if the author understands the importance of reporting suspected abuse so well, why did she not continue to fight for Grandma and Fanny?  She didn't just suspect - she had first-hand knowledge.  If I were in her position, I would be camped out at Adult Protective Services until someone took me seriously.